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« on: June 02, 2006, 06:31:15 PM »

Title: Stop Talking

Author: Ayabie aka Aya

Chapter: 1/1 (Though like my notes say, this may end up tying into another story)

Fandom: Resident Evil Apocalypse AU

Rating: P-13

Warnings: Adult Situations

Orientation: Gen

Pairing: None

Summary: What if Alice didn't escape at the end of the RE:A movie?

Disclaimer: Alice and any other references to the Resident Evil movies, books or game universe belong to Sony and Capcom. I own nothing. I'm just playing with their charries.

Feedback: Sure

Archive: Rhiana Griffith Fan Club yes. Sure, just ask.

Notes: Okay peeps, yes, yes this is vastly AU but then again when have my stories not been. And yep this may end up tying in with a crossover idea that's floating around in my head. And another yep, this is my first venture into the first crazy peep pov. I'd like to thank Jamelith, if it wasn't for her I'd never have gotten this nutty muse. Last but not least this hasn't been beta'ed much so... any mistakes are mine.

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They don't talk to me anymore. Couldn't tell you when they stopped exactly. Was it a day ago or a week, maybe a month, maybe even years and I just now noticed? Time doesn't mean much here, if it ever did I can't remember. Don't remember a lot of things. But I can remember a time when they would address me, ask me how I slept or if I was hungry or if this hurt or that when they poked and prodded me but now they don't even do that. Now they just scribble on their papers and whisper to each other. I don't know what they're whispering or writing about. Maybe I don't want to know. Maybe it'll all be worse if I did know. How, I'm not sure but it could, I suppose. All I do know is they don't talk to me anymore.

They're watching me though. I can feel their eyes on me. Everything I do, every move I make. If I talk or laugh. That might be what they're writing down. Never knew that I was so much fun to watch. I know they can see me through the dark glass surrounding my cage. Maybe they don't think I know that, but I do. Nothing I can do about it though.

It used to bother me when they stopped giving me robes. Didn't want them to see me naked. Thought that if I could at least chose to keep myself covered I would have some control over the situation. Stupid, silly thought since they control everything. I do know that. Well, they control everything except what's inside my head. That's my place. Anyway, I'm used to being watched, don't really care much now.

I suppose I'm just a number to them. Used to be a human. One five seven three, that's me. Sometimes after the tests, while my hurts go away, I rearrange the numbers in my mind but it always brings new questions, new things to think about. Would the tests be easier if I was five three one seven or would they be even worse? How could they be worse? Would they stop giving me vanilla ice cream if I was three one five seven? Actually that's a good thought because I don't like vanilla ice cream. I think I used to like it though.

I suddenly laugh and I hear the scribbling behind the glass get faster. They're probably wondering what's so funny. Good thing they aren't talking to me. Because if they were, they'd probably ask why and I don't have an answer to give them. I don't know why. As suddenly as I begun to laugh, I stop and turn toward the glass. I stick my tongue out at them for a second before looking down again. There, that'll give them something to write about.

Can't look at my reflection long. It scares me. I know there should be scars, big ones, all over me, making me look like the monster I am. Criss-crossing my entire body like a roadmap of all my tests. Point A leads point B. Point A starting next to my belly button and Point B would be right above my left nipple. I think now I've got the whole alphabet covered on me. A through Z of marks that should be. But when I look at myself they're not there. My skin's smooth and unmarked. I want them to be there!

I start pacing my cell and while I take the ten steps it takes to get from one side to the other, I trace where the scars should be. Right here, a Hunter's talon ripped open my arm from my wrist to my elbow. Couldn't move my hand for a while after. I brush my fingers over my side. Right here the damned stupid fucking dogs shredded me. It hurt so much and the blood ran down my thigh in red rivers. Thought that I was going to bleed to death before the damned stupid fucking mutts could tear out my throat. I remember... I think. I don't know! Did it really happen or was it just a horrid nightmare? I have those, a lot. I want my marks back damn it! They're mine! I earned every single one of them. Maybe if I could touch them it would help me remember things right again. Maybe.

Maybe none of this is real? Not the labs, not the scientists, not the tests and not me! I want to scream or cry. I'm scared. But mainly...

I wish they'd talk to me again so I could ask them if I'm really Alice anymore.
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« Reply #1 on: June 04, 2006, 09:05:51 AM »

This is what you were so scared of posting?

Aya, this is brilliant!
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« Reply #2 on: June 04, 2006, 05:22:47 PM »

*big giant hugs!* It worked, it really worked!  YOWZA!  TY!!!
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« Reply #3 on: April 04, 2007, 11:24:11 AM »

hehhhheheh.. you Tormentor you!!! 'bie! how could ya leave Alice in that lab? ... well, i know how.. cuz you a sadistic 'bie-atch and i love ya for it!!! Get ready for some feedie love hun! all in the best spirit and kindnesses... (is kindnesses a word??)

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How, I'm not sure but it could I suppose. All I do know is they don't talk to me anymore.


Perhaps a comma after 'could'.... it might convey a sense of despondency.. like a sigh... *shrugs*

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Never knew that I was so much fun to watch.
oh Alice... how could you think such a thing, you fine, fine specimen?

As suddenly as I started laughing, I stop and turn toward the glass.

I think 'started' should be 'start' i.e. As suddenly as I start laughing, I stop and turn towards the glass.... *or* As suddenly as I started laughing, I stopped and turn*ed towards the glass. But don’t really pay much attention to me... I am so confused when it comes to tense.. If it was me, I'd drop the word 'start/ed' and use 'began'. i.e. As suddenly as I began laughing, I stop and turn towards the glass... or should it be 'begin'? ????? ??? anyone? aaggghh.. bugger it!!


I remember... I think. I don't know!


I think if you italicized the sentence 'I don't know!' it may convey A's sense of utter f**kedness.. Dramatic Queen Enters Domain Smiley

Did it really happen or was it just a horrid nightmare? I have those, a lot. I want my marks back damn it! They're mine!


'I have those, a lot.' My suggestion (for what very little its worth) would be to use that sentence to further convey how A's nightmares are affecting her... Reality/fantasy/nightmare/truth... where is she? which realm? Just think it would open up that aspect of her madness a bit mo'.

MUTANT MADNESS.. wouldnt wanna be infected with that...

*HUGS* you go 'bie! GO!!!
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« Reply #4 on: April 04, 2007, 11:58:04 AM »

Aus-peep!!

First off I must *snuggle!* you senseless! Thank ya for ya fb, I really do appreciate it!

Now on to ya points Grin

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Perhaps a comma after 'could'.... it might convey a sense of despondency.. like a sigh... *shrugs*

Consider the comma slapped in!

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I think 'started' should be 'start' i.e. As suddenly as I start laughing, I stop and turn towards the glass.... *or* As suddenly as I started laughing, I stopped and turn*ed towards the glass. But don’t really pay much attention to me... I am so confused when it comes to tense.. If it was me, I'd drop the word 'start/ed' and use 'began'. i.e. As suddenly as I began laughing, I stop and turn towards the glass... or should it be 'begin'? ????? ??? anyone? aaggghh.. bugger it!!

I changed it to "begun to laugh", does that work? Grin

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I think if you italicized the sentence 'I don't know!' it may convey A's sense of utter f**kedness.. Dramatic Queen Enters Domain

We be italicized baby!

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'I have those, a lot.' My suggestion (for what very little its worth) would be to use that sentence to further convey how A's nightmares are affecting her... Reality/fantasy/nightmare/truth... where is she? which realm? Just think it would open up that aspect of her madness a bit mo'.

I shall think about this! May take me awhile but I will! Grin

Once again, thank ya so much for ya fb! *big giant snuggles!* Ya are the Aus!! I'm just all bouncy cause ya liked it! Grin
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« Reply #5 on: April 04, 2007, 12:31:53 PM »

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I changed it to "begun to laugh", does that work?

Spot freakin' on, honey! begin, began... BEGUN!!!  see.. between the two of us we just may get somewhere... like... survive the coming undead... (and the ones already here)... travel to new and interesting planets... (and survive unholy creatures of the night)... perhaps even consummate mutant-love between R.B.R and OneFiveSevenThree...


Keep on creating your worlds, lil miss 'bie.. for it is fantasy controlled by the creator with artistic licence... whom shall move the pawns, bishops and queens as she wishes, for the Realm belongs to the Author, and the Plot... well, who really needs Plot in FantasyFanFiction? your Charries are awesome, I adore both RE/RE:A and PB.. can't think of two more sexually charged characters I've enjoyed reading.

BIG LOVES AND SUPPORT TO YOU BUB!!!

just for you 'bie

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« Reply #6 on: April 04, 2007, 07:59:22 PM »

*big hugs!* TYTY! Check what ya did! Too cool!
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